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You cast light into the uncharted lands,
The darkest spots among the shifting sands,
Of the deserts, to the deepest trenches,
In the oceans of my heart.

Nothing even dares to hide
From this magnificent light so deep inside;
It's drowned the very thirst it quenches
From the very start.

These cartographers dream of the discoveries you've made,
Their expeditions and journies but a silly masquerade
In comparison to the glory of roads that you've paved
Into the farthest reaches of my heart.

You sing to the muses that hold legends
Of the demons and gods my heart defends,
And weave glory into their every story
Of your majesty in me.

No citizen or king can dare deny
Flowers and trees have blossomed high;
My nature's reached its full glory
Through your purity in me.

So bring me that horizon's line;
We'll sail these ships over lands divine,
Every corner of the seven seas ,
Of the world within my heart.

These cartographers dream of the discoveries you've made,
Their expeditions and journies but a silly masquerade
In comparison to the glory of roads that you've paved
Into the farthest reaches of my heart.

Though we still have much to brave,
I dare say I'll continue to rave
Like a lunatic over the insanity you inspire in me~
You shed light on the lands my heart's cartographers only dare to dream of..
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Puppy-eater Featured By Owner May 11, 2011  Student General Artist
Your poetry is amazing, (and so is your icon- it's so adorable)
I loved it.
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations! :party: You've been featured in our Weekly Roundup!

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nhavie Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011
Wow!! Thank you so much! It's such a great honor. This poem was a very deep and meaningful piece to me, so I'm thrilled to have it shared with our little literary world.
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That's great :) I hope we can get you a few more readers.
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nhavie Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011
That would be wonderful. :3
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TwoSpaces Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011
good
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nhavie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011
Well.. that's descriptive.
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TwoSpaces Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011
well ok great thean.
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That's really lovely. It's a beautiful concept and well constructed. :)

I'd recommend you consider adding punctuation to the ends of the lines. I tripped up a couple of times because I wasn't sure where the sentences ended, or where to take a breath. That did undermine the flow a little bit :(
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nhavie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011
Thank you!
Advice taken and done. =)
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Good lord! Now that's what I call service :)
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nhavie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011
Thank you, someone very close to me inspired this. Their love is pure radiating magnificence.

What exactly do you mean by service? Just delivering that kind of love? xD
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Service as in fixing the errors really quickly!
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nhavie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011
Hahaha. Yeah. I'm on the netterwebz a lot.
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